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Viljami
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PostPosted: Thu Jul 15, 2010 5:43 pm    Post subject: "lyrics/poetry" Reply with quote

Yikes. I never thought I'd do it, since I'm really spooked about showing these to anyone. Never shown these to anyone before. Anyway, here's some lyrics or "poetry".
Ideas, critique etc. is very welcome, since I think It's the only way to get better. And no, these are not about my life, although some bits here and there are. Please tell me if I wrote something wrong.

Human condition:

the shadows under your eyes
do their best
but cannot hide
the shadows behind your eyes

I found myself alone

where were you last night
my friend

I cannot keep you
or make you stay
the house is empty
the bed cold
the windows are broken
yet someone is here

breathing in the dark

truth
or what is left
of it
is always
in the shadows
behind your eyes

and mine.
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Viljami
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PostPosted: Thu Jul 15, 2010 5:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Blush

pupils dialate
capillaries flushed
with blood
touch carries
electricity

after all this time
time

It's still nice
to know

you open your
coffin of words
air escapes
from your lips
touch

after all this time
all


hair falls
on my chest
like the rain
outside

inside I'm warm

It's still nice to know
that after all this
time
I can
still make you

blush.
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 16, 2010 4:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Crap, I noticed that 'blush' not only has the same name as a Raveonettes song, it also has the same line. Back to the drawing board with them crayonz.
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 25, 2010 7:00 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Despite my hurtful ways, I can still make you

blush Embarassed
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 25, 2010 3:28 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

this is the latest song we are working on.


DANISH CURLING TEAM.

these cheetos make your
white shirt orange
chillin on the couch
with no pants on

downhill skiing
watch me peeing
allover ya face

look out the window
does that girl have pants?
jorts! those be jorts!

she loves water sports.
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 25, 2010 3:35 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

one i have in the works for next practice is called

TOUCHDOWN MACHINE

HOPE
for this community
for this town
for this city

HOME
where we are
where we live
where we want to be

LETS GO BUFF A LO

DISPAIR
at the end of the year
hope can be mean
touchdown machine




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the term (touchdown machine) was the name i gave James Hardy when i drafted him back in 2008 on my fantasy team. i told everyone in the basement he was going to be a touchdown machine and be this amazing player that the bills needed.

3 years later i think he has 5 or 6 catches total in 3 years.



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